c46: Script Draft 1, Beats 27-31

Constellation: Making the Graphic Novel

In this double episode, we get pages from both Ted and Jon.

Script Content:
-Tim, Zoya, and Csaba build shelters on Katall
-Tim hunts for a suitable murder target
-Zoya offers Tim an out (he doesn’t take it)
-Tim discovers Cranium’s secret TV lair and decides to make Cranium the target
-Tim goes to murder Cranium, while Zoya and Csaba tag along
-Zoya kills Tim before he can kill Cranium
-Flashback to Zoya’s childhood education with Mr. Hygge and her parents
Discussion:
-Where is Tim’s head at during this period of murder planning?
-How does Tim feel about Csaba?
-Would the Katallians have IVs in their infirmary?
-Tim might justify killing a Katallian with the logic: “They’ve already chosen to die, this is just altering the timeline.”
-What tastes in television would Cranium have? If he’s not zero gen, then he’s not nostalgic, just enamored of old timey stuff for aesthetic reasons.
-Do we need to backfill Tim’s apparent contempt for Cranium and hypocrites who don’t stick to their principles? Or is it not real contempt and more just an attempt to justify what he is doing?
-Does Cranium hear Csaba say “Now, you got him!” And is it possible that Csaba was talking about Tim and not Cranium, anyway?
-How many pages are we allotting for Zoya’s flashbacks? Is the school scene too long?
-This is our introduction to Richard and Alexis so we should describe them more.
-The schooling scene needs to be a blueprint that can be referenced by two future scenes: the indoctrination of children on Applonia and Zoya’s Alltaf initiation.
-What is the underlying motivation behind Zoya’s voiceover? Makes sense for it to be anchored in the moment that she’s just killed Tim, since that’s when it begins.